Hi, fortal12,
welcome to LT community. I wish you'll have a creative stay here with us!
I found some of the corrections you've made at Id's translation really good, some other not. But I don't understand, why you've added a "new" translation, when there is existing another one with near no differences??? You could suggest your (not really important) corrections in form of a comment under the existing translation, first... You didn't translate nothing, just copied and corrected a little bit. That way, it is nearly illegally copying!
We are posting here our own translations or we're adding the source, if the translation is written by an other translator. ;)
Please make your corrections at Id's translation and then delete yours. Thank you.
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