Dulce Pontes - Canção do mar (English translation)

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English translation

Song of the Sea

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I went to dance on my barge
out there in the merciless sea
and the roaring waves
said that I went to steal
the unmatched glitter
of your so lovely glance.
 
Come and see whether they are right.
Come here and see my heart dancing.
 
If I dance on my barge
I won’t sail to the merciless sea
nor will I tell it where I went to sing,
to smile, to dance, to live, to dream… about you.
 
Copyright®: Andrzej Pałka.

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Submitted by Aldefina on Wed, 09/08/2017 - 19:24
Last edited by Aldefina on Sun, 03/09/2017 - 12:17
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Metodius    Wed, 29/11/2017 - 20:43

The source lyrics have been updated. Please review your translation.

Aldefina    Thu, 30/11/2017 - 19:54

I see no changes, apart from the different formatting of the lyrics, which I find questionable. You can find these lyrics differently formatted - depending where you look - and I believe that what was earlier made more sense. If I format my translation the way you formatted the lyrics it would look very strange, both in English and in Polish.

I would suggest you to format them again the way they were.