Hello Dimitar, please forgive my intrusion. I would suggest you to click on the green button “Request proofreading” when you are translating into languages you don’t know very well, so other users can notice your request and help you.
Anyway, your translation isn’t so bad, it’s quite understandable. These are my suggestions:
Prego a te > Ti prego
Pardona > Perdona
Che sono vito > Io sono vivo
Che sono tuo servante > Che io sia il tuo servo
brilla > risplenda
In miei > Nei miei