SO like I said before, I need some help with French. I have to write an essay about our favourite building in France for my study, and I was hoping that one of the French speakers could help me out and correct the things where I'm wrong. Please tell me what I did wrong so I am able to learn from it.
The french text:
La Vieille Bourse
Á la grande fontaine sur la place du général de Gaulle se trouve le bâtiment plus beau que nous ayons vu. À partir du Nouveau Siècle, vous continuez tout droit. Continuez à marcher jusqu'à la rue Nationale. Tourner à droite, et vous y êtes en quelques minutes
Je sais que le bâtiment de la Chambre de Commerce et d'Industrie de Lille du passé. C'est l'un des lieux les plus touristiques de Lille. Je sais c’est aussi un lieu de rencontre pour les joueurs d’échecs, danseurs, et bouquinistes.
La Vieille Bourse est un bâtiment avec plusieurs magasins présents, dans la cour il y a une boutique d'antiquités. Il est possible d'acheter des vieilles cartes dans le magasin d’antiquités, des magazines, des livres et des affiches. Nous avons également acheté un carte là-bas. Si vous êtes un collectionneur? Je suis sûr que vous en profiterez!
Le bâtiment dispose d’une boutique de souvenirs, plusieurs bars, un bijoutier et un chocolatier. C'est un beau bâtiment, donc si vous savez que vous n'allez rien acheter, vous pouvez simplement admirer le bâtiment.
La vieille Bourse est ouverte à partir du 13:00 à 19:00 heures du soir.
And the English translation, to know what I meant to say:
La Vieille Bourse
Near the large fountain at the la Place du général de Gaulle is the in my opinion most beautiful building we have seen. If you come from the du Nouveau Siècle, Go forward, Keep walking until you’re at the la rue Nationale. Turn right and you should be there in a few minutes
I know that the building was used as the house of the trade and industry of Lille a long time ago. It’s one of the most touristic places in Lille. I know that it’s also a meeting place for chess players, dancers and book collectors
La Vieille Bourse is a building with several stores, in the courtyard is a antique shop. It’s possible to buy old postcards in the antique store but you can also buy magazines, books and posters. We bought a postcard there ourselves. If you are an collector, than is this the place to be!
The building has also a souvenir shop, several cafés, a juwelier and a chocolate shop. It’s a beautiful boulding, so even if you didn’t plan to buy anything, you would probably still enjoy looking at the building.
La Vieille Bourse is open from 1:00 PM until 7:00 PM
Thanks in advance!
Is this an essay that you will hand in and then receive a mark from a teacher?
Already much better !
"Je sais que le bâtiment de la Chambre de Commerce et d'Industrie de Lille du passé." Something seems to be lacking between "Lille" and "du passé". Perhaps "est un témoignage", or something like that ?
"Je sais c’est aussi un lieu" > Je sais que c'est aussi un lieu
"Nous avons également acheté un carte là-bas" > Nous y avons également acheté une carte.
"à partir du 13:00 à 19:00 heures du soir." > de 13 heures à 19 heures.
The rest of it seems basically OK, congratulations.
I won't get a mark, we're working on a big poster to show the new students where we are going to during our study and so everyone can learn from the most beautiful places in France. (; I shouldn't be asking for help on here if it was for a mark cause that would've been cheating
Thanks for helping me out, I changed the things you mentioned (;
The English version could use some improvements.
Near the large fountain at the "la Place du général de Gaulle" is, in my opinion, the most beautiful building we have seen. If you are coming from the "du Nouveau Siècle", go forward, keep walking until you’re at the "la rue Nationale"; turn right and you should be there in a few minutes.
The building has been used as the House of Trade and Industry of Lille for a long time ago. It’s one of the most touristy place in Lille and a meeting place for chess players, dancers and book collectors.
"La Vieille Bourse" is a building with several stores. In the courtyard is a antique shop where you can buy old postcards, magazines, books and posters. We bought a postcard there ourselves. If you are a collector this the place to visit!
The building has also a souvenir shop, several cafés, a jeweller and a chocolates shop. It’s a beautiful bulding, so even if you don't plan to buy anything you would probably still enjoy looking at the building.
La Vieille Bourse is open from 1:00 PM until 7:00 PM
Hi everyone! I was intrigued by your topic. I state that my French is quite poor, but I notice something odd.
Maybe I’m wrong, but – with great humility- I suggest you to revise and turn some sentence in a more suitable way(I’m not able to…)
compare with:
I know that the building was used as the house of the trade and industry of Lille a long time ago.
1)êtes vous un collectionneur?
2)Si vous êtes un collectionneur, je suis sûr …
vous n'allez rien à acheter
Good luck! :)
Point 1, true, something ought to be changed here.
Point 2, I guess it's just a typo ("?" instead of ",", they share the same key).
Point 3, Anna, why do you try to mislead the poor guy ! "Vous n'allez rien acheter" is perfectly right, it means "you're not going to buy anything". You'll have to copy it 100 times ! :)
Bowien, I don't know if you still need help, or somebody might have already made these corrections.
"..le bâtiment le plus beau..."
"la Vieille Bourse renferme plusieurs bâtiments, dans la cour..." "Nous avons également acheté une carte..." "Si vous êtes un collectionneur, je suis.." Le bâtiment dispose également d'une..."
English:
"..is in my opinion the most beautiful building we have ever seen. "....if you are a collector, then this is the place to be!"
"The building also has a souvenir...., a jeweler/jewelry..."