L'avvelenata (Englisch Übersetzung)

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Englisch Übersetzung

The embittered

Frankly, if I had expected all of this
Data reasons and pretexts
The present conclusions
Do you think that for these four pennies,
For this shitty glory
I would have written songs?
 
Okay, I admit I made a mistake
And I accept the Crucifixion and so be it.
I ask for time, I am of my kind
As great as it is, I am the first who studied
 
All things considered my father was right
Saying that the retirement is truly important
In fact my mother wasn't wrong
Saying that a graduate is more than a singer
 
Young and naive I lost my head
Blame the books or my provincialism
And a cock in the butt and accusations of careerism,
Suspicion of political apathy is all I've got left now
 
You critics, you auster characters
Severe militants I ask pardon to Your Graces.
But I have never said that with songs
You can make revolutions, you can make poetry
 
I sing when I can, how I can
Whenever I feel like it, regardless of applause or boos.
Selling or not selling isn't part of my risks,
Don't buy my disks and spit out on me.
 
According to you, what do I care
About taking the trouble of
Standing up there singing?
I enjoy much more getting drunk
Or masturbating
Or at a pinch, fucking.
 
If I am ill-humored then I write
By digging into our miseries
I usually do more serious things
Like building on rubbles or keeping myself alive.
 
Me all, me nothing, me jerk, me drunkard
Me poet, me jester, me anarchist, me fascist
Me rich, me no-money, me radical
Me different and me same, nigger, jewish, communist!
 
Me fag, me I-am-a-singer-I-know-how-to-pick-up-girls.
Me false, me true, me genius, me fool
Me alone here at four o'clock in the morning
The anguish and a bit of wine
A desire to swear.
 
According to you, who makes me
Stay and listen
To everybody who have sob stories?
Obvious, the doctor says "You're depressive"
Even in the crapper
I don't have one moment to myself.
 
And I who have always said it was just a joke
To know or not to know how to use a certain meter,
Comrades, the joke has become heavy and gloomy
Just buy my ass, I sell it on the cheap.
 
Songwriter colleagues, elected flock
Who sells yourself at night
For a few millions
You who are capable you're right to
Have the pockets full
And not just the balls.
 
What can I say to you? Go ahead and do it.
There will always be, you know it,
A failed musician, a pious, a theoretical philosopher
A Bertoncelli1 and a priest who says some shit.
 
But frankly if I had expected all of this
Data reasons and pretexts
Maybe I would make the same thing
I love to make songs and to drink wine
I love to party
And also I am born as a bloody idiot.
 
And so I move on, and I don't shuffle
Off the clothes I usually wear
I have so much things to tell
To anyone who will listen
...and fuck everything else!
 
  • 1. Fun fact: Riccardo Bertoncelli is a music critic who had torn to shreds an earlier album by Guccini and accused him of having sold himself to the majors. Shortly afterwards, they met to discuss the review and the song and started to like each other. Guccini offered to remove the name from the song, but Bertoncelli declined. (Thanks Gyps Fulvus for the explanation!)
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Italienisch

L'avvelenata

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matilda2340    Fr, 08/01/2016 - 19:30

First of all - I appreciate your work!!!

I have to confess that neither English nor Italian is anything near like my mother language, but nevertheless I would like to make some suggestions - that would have to be verified by others, of course!

As great as was the first thing I studied.
I think it should be:
of my kind, as great as it is, I am the first who studied

They have seen life the books and my provincialism
(has it been the books or my provincialism)

Doubts of apathy are what I have left
(doubts of the mainstream is what I still have/stays with me)

Are made revolutions or could be made poesy.
(you can make revolutions, you can make poetry)

Selling or not selling is part of my risks,
(selling or not is not part of my risk)

But according to you I don't give a shit Of assuming the rancor Of being here singing?
(according to you, but what do I care about taking the trouble of standing up there singing)

But according to you who forces me
(according to you, but who makes me stay and listen..)

Of course, the doctor says "You're depressive"
(obvious ....)

Colleagues composer-songwriter-player
(songwriter colleagues, elected flock?)

And then I scrape a living and I do not get dressed With the clothes I used to wear
(And so I move on, and I don't shuffle off the clothes I only know to wear)

love and hugs

Keskonsmär Parici    Fr, 08/01/2016 - 20:05

Thanks a lot for your feedback! I really needed a proofreading, for neither am I an Italian or English native speaker, so I was sure my work should be improved.
I'm going to make the changes you suggested.
Thank you again, for your suggestions allow me to improve not only this translation, but also my understanding of English expressions.

matilda2340    Fr, 08/01/2016 - 20:08

I know, it helps understanding ;-) - but don't forget - I am austrian- there might be still bad mistakes!!!!!
have a nice day

Gyps Fulvus    Mi, 16/03/2016 - 20:49

Hi! Great job on a very difficult song. It's full of reference to very specific aspects of the Italian cultural environment of the early 70s. A few ideas to complete what matilda2340 (good job too!) has already said:

"Has it been life books or my provincialism"
blame the books or my provincialism

"Doubts of the mainstream are what stay with me"
suspicion of political apathy is all I've got left now

"When I fancy without applauses nor whistles"
whenever I feel like it, regardless of applause or boos
(In Italy, a disapproving audience whistles at performers)

"According to you, but what do I care"
According to you, what do I care
("ma" = but, however in this case it is just pleonastic)

"Me fag, me who sings because I know how to lead people on"
Me fag, me I-am-a-singer-know-how-to-pick-up-girls

"Want me to blaspheme"
a desire to swear

"tiramento" is slang, it probably means "sob story"

"teorete" = theoretical philosopher

" the clothes I only know to wear"
the clothes I usually wear

"...and fuck everybody else!"
...and fuck everything else!

Fun fact: Riccardo Bertoncelli is a music critic who had torn to shreds an earlier album by Guccini and accused him of having sold himself to the majors. Shortly afterwards, they met to discuss the review and the song and started to like each other. Guccini offered to remove the name from the song, but Bertoncelli declined.

Keskonsmär Parici    Mi, 16/03/2016 - 23:09

I think about it again afterwards : as the sentence "Secondo voi ma chi me lo fa fare..." becomes "According to you, who makes me", maybe I should remove the "but" also in "But if I had expected all of this"? Or maybe I should rather write something like "Frankly, if I had expected all of this..."
What do you think? What is the best?

Keskonsmär Parici    Mi, 16/03/2016 - 22:04

Thanks a lot for your suggestions, I'm going to make the changes right now!

About "whenever I feel like it, regardless of applause or boos", I wasn't sure of the sense because also in France, the public whistles when he is unhappy with the performance...but he also whistles he really likes the performance a lot (he just doesn't whistle in the same tone)

Thanks also for the anecdote about Bertoncelli...I'm going to add it in a footnote.

Gyps Fulvus    Do, 17/03/2016 - 15:36

Hi! Thank you for your message. First of all, I made a mistake in one of my suggestions:

"Me fag, me who sings because I know how to lead people on"
Me fag, me I-am-a-singer-I-know-how-to-pick-up-girls
(the second "I" was missing in the previous version, sorry)

Then, regarding "But if I had expected all of this", English is not my mother language, so I am not sure how to deal with it. You are right, it's the same structure used in the other sentences, I never realized it Regular smile I don't think it's a big deal, but you could remove the "but" here too.

As for the whistles, in this case I am pretty confident Guccini is referring to a booing crowd, especially because applause is mentioned too, although sometimes whistles are a way of showing support too.

@matilda2340: I love your suggestion "eletta schiera" = "elected flock". That's brilliant!

Everyone, good job!

Gyps Fulvus    So, 20/03/2016 - 03:01

Hi, I have just realized there may be something missing:
"Compagni" is the word that Communist sympathizers use(d) to address each other and should probably be translated as "Comrades". This term does have a lot of other uses in Italian (i.e. "compagni di scuola" = schoolmates; "compagni di squadra" = teammates) but I'd say in this case it refers to people with similar political views. Similarly, "militanti severi" probably refers to strict followers of Communist Party ideas, but the translation works fine IMHO.

Keskonsmär Parici    So, 20/03/2016 - 09:38

Thanks again!
Also, there's something I don't understand, maybe it refers to an aspect of Italian culture. It's the lines : "...ho sempre detto che era un gioco / sapere usare o no d'un certo metro"
Do you know what he is talking about? I thought maybe it was a way to say "to act with a certain moderation, a certain discipline" but I find it doesn't fit very well with the rest of the song.

Gyps Fulvus    So, 20/03/2016 - 16:22

Well, I am not 100% sure, but I think it refers to the poetical meter, i.e. the rhythmic structure of verses and by extension of song lyrics:

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Metre_%28poetry%29

So he's probably saying that he always considered songwriting a pastime and he doesn't want his songs to be taken too seriously. Basically it's the same message as "But I have never said that with songs /
You can make revolutions, you can make poetry".

The '70s in Italy were a period of strong political clashes and later other singers (especially Francesco De Gregori) were harshly criticized by the far left who saw their songs as not enough politically charged.

Therefore your current translation works very well IMHO!
Sorry for the lengthy explanation, hope this helps.

Keskonsmär Parici    So, 20/03/2016 - 17:21

Yes, it makes sense now! In fact I don't know how I could have missed that he was refering to the poetic metre! Thanks a lot!

Gyps Fulvus    So, 20/03/2016 - 20:22

Well, the expression "sapere usare o no d'un certo metro" is not standard Italian, but rather what we would call "linguaggio aulico".
Anyway, your translation was and is excellent!

From Wordreference:
For "linguaggio aulico" in Italian we mean a language which is refined, which you don't use in ordinary conversation, which you can find, most of all, in works of "high" literature. Generally speaking, a language which is associated to a superior education, expecially education in humanistic subjects.

http://forum.wordreference.com/threads/linguaggio-aulico.1447058/