На диете целый год (English translation)


На диете целый год

На диете целый год
Пробыла девица.
Врач никак не попадет
Шприцем в ягодицу.
Submitted by St. SolSt. Sol on Mon, 25/03/2019 - 14:47
English translation (equirhythmic, rhyming)
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For Entire Year One Lass

For entire year one lass
Stayed on steady diet.
Needle now can't find her ass, -
Doctors can't keep quiet.
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Submitted by St. SolSt. Sol on Mon, 25/03/2019 - 16:03
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UncommonUncommon    Mon, 25/03/2019 - 17:03

Is there need for plural form of doctor?
I don't insist that it is at all necessary, just interested in your approach to the translation.
Also i would use keto diet lol just to make it modern =)

St. SolSt. Sol    Mon, 25/03/2019 - 16:31

"Doctor" needs an article: that would break the meter.
Another option is: Doctors had a riot. Regular smile

UncommonUncommon    Mon, 25/03/2019 - 16:32

I just don't use articles, that's all - life much simpler this way Wink smile