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Katsuro

Mon, 25/04/2022 - 01:23

Hey Hiroshi, I got some suggestions that in my opinion would improve your translation, can you take a look at this and maybe integrate it?

Wouldn't living without tears end up easier too? 6
Don't show me anything else 8

No matter how close I get to you 9
I only have one heart 10
Horrible, it's horrible; Just take my body 11

I've had enough. 15

But since it doesn't exist for me 18

I only have one heart 21
Stop, please stop, don't be nice to me 22

Horrible, it's horrible; Just take my body 26
But you're still holding me close, and won't let go 29 (just a typo "mr" instead of "me")
I've had enough. 30

Hey, if I had a heart 31
How am I supposed to find it? 32
"Its right here, you know" 34

and because of this last part here, I would argue that the title should be "Somewhat heartless", or just "heartless", even though it is written with the kanji for "somewhat", it sounds like "heartless" and the song text suggests that meaning. In English, the pun does not work with only one word, but it works with both meanings next to each other, that's why "Somewhat heartless".

uji na

Mon, 25/04/2022 - 01:31

Why don't you try "Add new translation" ? (retranslation)

Hiroshi

Thu, 28/04/2022 - 15:46

I am busy with life and I rarely went on this site so I just opened the proofreading as to users of this website to correct me. All the translations were taken from Sou cover of this song so ye... I am sorry for the wrong or poorly translation

uji na

Mon, 25/04/2022 - 03:01

according to Japanese dictionary, 心無し is "heartless" but 心做し is not "heartless". It's similar to きのせい. somewhat.
"心做し"か痩せて見える = "気のせい"か痩せて見える　(looking somewhat thin)
so, I think 心做し can be Somehow, Somewhat, or Seemingly.

I think, the biggest mistake in Hiroshi's text is Line 18. でも僕には存在しないから is translated wrongly.
And, I don't know why he keeps using the word, "corpse". Corpse is dead body, right?

Hiroshi

Thu, 28/04/2022 - 15:47

It wasn't my original translation (‘◉⌓◉’)

Don Juan

Thu, 28/04/2022 - 15:58

Where did you get that translation from? Please mention the source whenever you add something you haven't done yourself. Also, please check for accuracy before pasting here, if it's reported, poor unsourced translations may be removed.

Hiroshi

Thu, 28/04/2022 - 16:02

Hi, ye... It's been long time ago, so I honestly didn't do lot of revisions on my older translations, but I will check each and every to try to fix the typos or formatting, or in some cases open proofreading or remove. I am sincerely sorry.

Katsuro

Thu, 28/04/2022 - 16:25

Hiroshi,
Opening up to proofreading just invites others to write comments, we can't directly edit your translation, but of course I could add my version as another translation if you like that better.

uji na,
Yes I know that it's written "心做し" which is "somehow / somewhat" in the dictionary, but from the meaning of the text and when you hear the word, the meaning "heartless" is strongly implied, rather than "somewhat".
But yeah, maybe a footnote explaining the possible pun is the safest option.

1.	Nightcord at 25:00 All Songs
2.	ChouchouP - Kokoronashi cover songs in other languages

1.	心做し (Kokoronashi)
2.	え？あぁ、そう。 (E? Aa, sou.)
3.	About Me

心做し → English translation

Somehow

心做し

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