Ponchki (Пончики) (English translation)

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Ponchki (Пончики)

Заказали винчика с пончиком,
С тепленьким, вот-вот из печи.
Каждый со свои телефончиком -
Хорошо сидим и молчим.
Письма, сообщения, фоточки,-
Цифровая псевдо-возня.
Окна на экране, как форточки
Хлопают, и жуткий сквозняк.
Кто часы проводит за "тыканьем",
У того заглавный вопрос:
Как же там относишься ты ко мне -
Ты прокомментировал пост?
Ты поставил лайки на новое,
Оценил мой жизненный стиль?
Плещется в бокале вино мое,
Пончик на тарелке блестит -
Натюрморт достойный внимания.
- Погоди, не ешь, извини...
Это не какая-то мания,
Это - электронный дневник.
Батареи датчик совсем иссяк,
Каждому - к себе на район,
Может напоследок заселфимся?
Всё-таки мы были вдвоем!
Submitted by Olenka on Mon, 19/10/2015 - 20:46
Last edited by Sophia_ on Fri, 25/08/2017 - 15:35
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English translation


We ordered some wine with donut,
With the warm one, just from the stove.
Everyone with his own mobile phone -
We are sitting well keeping silence.
Letters, messages, photos.
A digital pseudo-fuss.
Windows on the screen like the window leaves
They are clapping, and there's a creepy draft
The one who spend own time on "tapping"
Has a main question:
How do you feel about me -
Have you commented the post?
Have you put a "like" on new posts,
Have you rated my lifestyle?
There's my wine splashing in glass,
There's a donut shining on the plate -
A worthy of attention still life.
- Wait, don't eat this, sorry...
This is not some mania,
This is an electronic diary.
The battery level is dying,
The each one to own district,
Maybe we take a selphie at last?
Still, we've been together!
Please don't hesitate to correct me, especially if the translation language is your native language.
With Best Regards,
© Alexander Laskavtsev
Submitted by Alexander Laskavtsev on Mon, 23/07/2018 - 12:35
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Sophia_    Mon, 23/07/2018 - 12:37