Help - currect me

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<a href="/en/translator/willian" class="userpopupinfo username" rel="user1355522">Willian</a>
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Hi guys, I tried to write the lyrics to a song, but I believe there are many mistakes, because my native language is Portuguese and I still don't understand English well. this lyrics is from a song I ordered two years ago, but I know it's difficult, because the song is sung in English, but the band is from my country of origin and it's a very fast rhythm, so I had to slow down the video on YouTube for x0.5 speed. if anyone can make the correction I would appreciate it very much.
The parts that I had doubts or could not understand are in parentheses and with question marks

https://youtu.be/9gtqrv2Zhc0

Lights
Let me eternal life of eternal light
By my Spirit
(This of The) Air, (this of The) land
ALL Time (and space)
Eternity, imortality,
Eternal lights to nation
Homosapiens, highlight of my creation

He (?) of Man
From dust of The land
(The) Breathed of Your in soul
But know I (?) your heaven
(Destroiyng) sin Your) hands
Days (pass and He) makes Lord

Almighty
Eyes of flame
Almighty
(Son of man)

Life, criated by Your hands
(Is as the for Your touch)
(Take I no reason)
Everything for You
Everyday with You
For man is all dominion
Destroiyng (all) plan
Burning thing
Arised by the (passion)
(By the sin Your hope)
(???????????)

He (?) of Man
From dust of The land
(The) Breathed of Your in soul
But know I (?) your heaven
(Destroiyng) (sin Your) hands
Days (pass and He) makes Lord

Almighty
Eyes of flame
Almighty
(Son of man)

He (?) of Man
From dust of The land
(The) Breathed of Your in soul
But know I (?) your heaven
(Destroiyng) (sin Your) hands
Days (pass and He) makes Lord

Almighty
Eyes of flame
Almighty
(Son of man)

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<a href="/en/translator/onamonapia" class="userpopupinfo username" rel="user1289490">onamonapia</a>
Joined: 27.04.2016

This is really hard. I'm a native speaker and I can barely make out the words. However, the first line should be "Let there be light" instead of "let me eternal life". I believe the first line of the chorus is "The tale of foreign man". Sorry, I wish I could be more helpful.

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<a href="/en/translator/willian" class="userpopupinfo username" rel="user1355522">Willian</a>
Joined: 22.09.2017

Thank you

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<a href="/en/translator/ogingero" class="userpopupinfo username" rel="user1352420">OgingerO</a>
Joined: 08.09.2017

I would suggest running your translation through a spell check. (Destroiyng should be destroying. criated should be created).
That said -
Some of the phrases don't make sense (grammatically. ..... like "The) Breathed of Your in soul" , it should be something like the breathe of your soul, or something like that... but that makes no sense even when it's correct grammatically) - maybe they're not meant to make sense. I can't make out the words either (native speaker here). I think your best bet would be to find their bandcamp or facebook page and ask for the lyrics. Good luck!

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<a href="/en/translator/willian" class="userpopupinfo username" rel="user1355522">Willian</a>
Joined: 22.09.2017

Thank's

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<a href="/en/translator/willian" class="userpopupinfo username" rel="user1355522">Willian</a>
Joined: 22.09.2017

Guys, look here again. I was listening, trying to understand and changing some things according to the tips of friends here. I believe that the letter has evolved a lot, leaving some details to be corrected and added. help me please. each tip and each correction is very valuable

https://youtu.be/9gtqrv2Zhc0

Lights
Let there be light and there was lights
By my Spirit
Beast of the Air, beast of the land
All (?) species
Eternity, imortality,
Eternal lights to nation
Homosapiens, highlight of my creation

And they have formed Man
From dust of The land
And Breathed of into his soul
Put know I give your Adam
Be drawing with our hands
They that and makes Lord

Almighty
Eyes of flame
Almighty
(Son of man)

Life, criated by Your hands
(Is as the for Your touch)
Take I no (written)
Everything for You
Everyday with You
For man is all dominion
The fall of plan
Burning thing
Arised by the patience
By the sin Your fall
Under claim about redemption (?)

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<a href="/en/translator/ogingero" class="userpopupinfo username" rel="user1352420">OgingerO</a>
Joined: 08.09.2017

Spelling - created, immortality.
Grammar - take I no (makes no sense, is there another word here? Maybe it's : take I not (or don't)
?
"Put know" makes no sense. Maybe it's knowledge?

It's much better, you're doing great!

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<a href="/en/translator/willian" class="userpopupinfo username" rel="user1355522">Willian</a>
Joined: 22.09.2017

I can’t get any further, I’d really like to finish, but I’m not getting it. I understand something like "could know like ... Haven (or Adam), the other parts I can't understand.

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<a href="/en/translator/ogingero" class="userpopupinfo username" rel="user1352420">OgingerO</a>
Joined: 08.09.2017

Can you write to the band itself or one of it's members and get the lyrics?

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<a href="/en/translator/willian" class="userpopupinfo username" rel="user1355522">Willian</a>
Joined: 22.09.2017

no, I don't have social networks, only You Tube