כשאומרים לי לא (Kshe'Omrim Li Lo) (English translation)

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כשאומרים לי לא

כל מסיבה שהם סוגרים
כל פסטיבל שמפזרים
כל מגבר שמנתקים
כל רעיון שמבטלים
כל יצירה שהם פוסלים
כל ענף שהם כורתים
כל כנף שהם שוברים
כל חלום שמנפצים
כל פה שהם סותמים
כל גדר שהם בונים
כל מכשול שהם שמים
כל כוכב שמרסקים
 
זה מגביר לי את הרעש מבפנים,
מגביר לי את הרעש...
 
כי כשאומרים לי לא לרקוד - אני רוקד יותר
כשאומרים לי לא לחשוב - אני חושב יותר
כשאומרים לא לאהוב - אני אוהב יותר
כשאומרים לי לא לעוף - אני עף, אני עף...
 
אם אפשר לחלום בלי לפחד
אם אפשר לרקוד בלי לשחד
אם אפשר לצעוק בלי לאבד
את הקול, את הכל
נהפוך עד הבוקר אדמה לאבק
אם צריך, הריקוד הוא מאבק
נלחש את השירים ואחר כך נצעק
 
זה מגביר לי את הרעש מבפנים,
מגביר לי את הרעש...
 
כי כשאומרים לי לא לרקוד - אני רוקד יותר
כשאומרים לי לא לחשוב - אני חושב יותר
כשאומרים לא לאהוב - אני אוהב יותר
כשאומרים לי לא לעוף - אני עף, אני עף...
 
Submitted by Thomas222Thomas222 on Tue, 18/08/2020 - 12:28
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When they tell me NO

Every party that they close,
Every festival they disperse,
Every amplifier they disconnect,
Every idea they put down,
Every creation they disqualify,
Every branch they saw off,
Every wing they break,
Every dream they smash,
Every mouth they silence,
Every fence they build,
Every obstacle they put,
Every star they crush.
 
It amplifies my internal noise
Amplifies my noise...
 
When they tell me not to dance – I dance more,
When they tell me not to think – I think more,
When they tell me not to love – I love more,
When they tell me not to fly – I fly, I fly...
 
If one can dream without being afraid,
If one can dance without giving bribes,
If one can shout without losing
The voice, it all 1
Till the morning we’ll turn the ground to dust.
If needed the dance is struggle for us,
We’ll whisper the songs and later we’ll shout.
 
It amplifies my internal noise
Amplifies my noise...
 
When they tell me not to dance – I dance more,
When they tell me not to think – I think more,
When they tell me not to love – I love more,
When they tell me not to fly – I fly, I fly...
 
  • 1. in Hebrew voice is KOL and all is COL, pronounced the same way
Thanks!
thanked 2 times
Submitted by IsraelWuIsraelWu on Wed, 19/08/2020 - 12:03
Last edited by IsraelWuIsraelWu on Fri, 21/08/2020 - 06:49
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OgingerOOgingerO    Thu, 28/10/2021 - 10:22

כל יצירה שהם פוסלים
פוסלים = reject or invalidate, would be less confusing here.

IMHO, disqualify makes no sense in English (in this context). (Like if you were entering a creation in a contest, then it could be disqualified, but it doesn't really fit the lyrics' meaning here).

IsraelWuIsraelWu    Fri, 29/10/2021 - 13:02

Thanks, however I just see it differently. IMHO, "invalidate" definitely doesn't fit here (it's not a vaccine against COVID a day after its validity date). Reject and disqualify, well, sorry, I see them as "almost full" synonyms. A song could be submitted to a record company, not as a part of a contest, just regular submittal, and rejected by it immediately or disqualified and rejected later for some technical reason or a "moral" reason or say, a legal problem, kind of a recent small addition to an existing law about minors not being allowed to sing "these" words in public. Or just me - rejecting a proposition of friendship following disqualifying it in my mind on some personal grounds. A "contest" is not an issue here. As I write i it even seems to me, it's not only equivalent, it's much better. "Reject" is more bounded, personal and for people close to me in their views. "Disqualify", it's as if I have the right to "reject" it in the name of a larger community

OgingerOOgingerO    Fri, 29/10/2021 - 13:52

Invalidate is the opposite of validation, that has no sole attachment to documents, one can validate or invalidate a person by behavior.

As in, "made her feel invalidated" or "validated his belief".

You can't say the same thing about disqualified. In order to be disqualified you first must be "qualified" or have the absence of qualification.

You don't disqualify a friendship, but you can reject it.

I think you are misunderstanding what disqualification is. You can be disqualified from a competition you initially QUALIFIED for, because of cheating... but you can't be disqualified in general. You can, however, be rejected with no effort on your part.

IsraelWuIsraelWu    Fri, 29/10/2021 - 15:44

I never said I can disqualify a friendship. I can always disqualify a proposition I have received - it's just not in the scope I have defined to myself, a gut feeling, whatever, and than I reject a proposal, OK?
You see the world as static. You can be qualified (or not) to register for any kind of competition, the conditions remain static, you compete and are accepted or rejected and later on you go thru the stages of the competition.
He is a rebel. We live in a dynamic world. We don't register to compete for everything we want to achieve, we just compete. In this type of competition the rules are flexible. Nobody tells him his creation is rejected because..., he and his creation are disqualified, period! Don't come again, don't compete again, we don't want you. And he comes back even stronger, because he believes he'll change "the reality". And I believe that most of the readers on LT would qualify to understand this context (especially, when reading the whole song, not just this line).

OgingerOOgingerO    Fri, 29/10/2021 - 16:06

You can't disqualify a CREATION. A proposition can't be disqualified if it's never submitted for qualification. 🙄

IsraelWuIsraelWu    Fri, 29/10/2021 - 20:03

Do I dream? Or is this the BIG BANG calling? I was talking about his creation (small c), a poem, a song not THE CREATION. We both know nothing or very little about it so let's not discuss it, and stay friends, OK? If you mean an RFP/RFQ, I have seen a lot of them submitted for evaluation and all of them were evaluated, quantified and qualified, then most of them (if not all of them) disqualified in internal analysis and all of them except, hopefully, at least one, rejected.

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