Really good translation, only minor thing I might mention is that if you want to try and maintain the meter/flow of the original title, you could shorten it to "Seeing Far, Seeing Clear" (to make sure it scans where it comes up in the song, you could change it within the text to "perhaps like at Mount Nevo, *we're* seeing far, seeing clear").

Also, there doesn't seem to be a playlist for Yom HaZikaron - might it be worth creating one? I've done a few translations of memorial day songs in recent years and I know there are others.