Hi, Rannie,
I have translated this song, Pedro Infante's version. I just want to point out a couple errors you have on interpretation:
1. First verse, "Pasastes a mi lado"- "Pasaste", here, means "Pass by" not "stay".
2, Verses five and six - "Te vi / Te hablé" = " I looked at you / I spoke to you".
Your style, if different that mine, is your prerogative.
Thank you for your contribution.
My favorite Selena song. It's so sad and beautiful!