FEDUK - Luna-park (Луна-парк) (Angol translation)

Proofreading requested
Angol translation

Luna park

My life it’s like a luna park, I’m shooting range from the morning
Then looping till I vomit on the carousel
I drank a lemonade, I felt better, happier
Sweet bank, like cotton bubble gum and I chase it!
 
(?) I’ve got my subscription
Lots of token in the machines and I’m not a subscriber
I’m walking with a smile, I’m a cartoon - Mickey Mouse
This city is a half-clown, they scare me
 
My life is like a luna park,
Luna park, luna park, luna park
My life is like a luna park,
Luna park, luna park, luna park
 
See, the parade of planets is floating weightless
To the deepest depths, where the water comes from (?)
Life here is an attraction and do not go to the fortuneteller.
This city is a City future, all dreams will come true
 
Fly in my luna park,luna park, luna park, luna park!
Fly in my luna park,luna park, luna park, luna park!
My life is like a luna park,luna park, luna park, luna park!
My life is like a luna park,luna park, luna park, luna park!
Fly in my luna park,luna park, luna park, luna park!
Fly in my luna park,luna park, luna park, luna park!
 
Kűldve: Lizia Szombat, 02/06/2018 - 14:59
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Luna-park (Луна-парк)

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Igeethecat    Szombat, 02/06/2018 - 15:29

Луна-парк in Russian is more like those temporary establishments for fairs, festivals, etc. - rides, attractions (like shooting the goal, cornhole, horseshoe, etc. games), cotton candies, popcorn, hotdogs, etc.
There is a word for this in English, but it totally escaped my mind

Lizia    Szombat, 02/06/2018 - 16:11

Maybe "funfair"? I chose the word "luna park" because it was identical and I didn't want to change the text too much, but I can change it!
Have you got any suggestions for the missing parts? (I have no idea what "рокем" means in this context!)

Igeethecat    Szombat, 02/06/2018 - 16:27

I hear “I don’t care” for рокем, though the first thought was about Pokémon, and it might be, but I don’t play those games

And about ‘luna park’ - it works for me because I am Russian and I know what it is (or used to be), but for the others it might be confusing