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Разделённые бременем часовых поясов (Razdelyonnyye bremenem chasovykh poyasov) (Angol translation)

Разделённые бременем часовых поясов

Разделённые бременем часовых поясов
Мы плутаем меж тысячи нам чужих голосов.
У ретивого времени не сбавляется бег,
И привстав в звонком стремени мы летим через век.
 
Но в безумной погоне той нас окликнут друзья
И на миг остановится круговерть бытия,
Песни, трели и сказки тронут тонкий эфир
И вернутся вдруг краски в этот суетный мир.
 
Kűldve: LizzzardLizzzard Szerda, 23/09/2020 - 18:05
Submitter's comments:

для моего друга, Пьера)

Angol translationAngol (poetic, rhyming)
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By the encumbrance of time zones separated

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By the encumbrance of time zones separated,
We drift midst thousands of voices unrelated.
The zealous time doesn’t slow down its race,
And half-risen in tinkling stirrups, we fly through eon’s maze.
 
Maybe in that wild chase, our friends will call to us,
And for an instant, the whirlwind of being will thus
stop — and songs, trills, fairytales will disperse into the aether.
And suddenly, this earthly place would anew regain its colors measure.
 
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Kűldve: BlackSea4everBlackSea4ever Csütörtök, 06/05/2021 - 23:01
Last edited by BlackSea4everBlackSea4ever on Szerda, 12/05/2021 - 16:22
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Green_SattvaGreen_Sattva    Péntek, 07/05/2021 - 18:16

Спасибо за перевод, Диана! Regular smile

LizzzardLizzzard    Szombat, 08/05/2021 - 16:53

Ох, Ди! спасибо огроменное!)
Мне особенно нравится эта поэтическая находка с "we fly through eons maze"
Звучит прямо захватывающе!))
♥♥♥♥♥

dmdavdmdav    Hétfő, 10/05/2021 - 10:12

Может быть следует пометить этот перевод как "poetic" и "rhyming"?

BlackSea4everBlackSea4ever    Szerda, 12/05/2021 - 12:51

Dmitri, you didn’t like my version? I made this translation because Liz mentioned our friend who left LT months ago.
I was hoping he will hear, read, ponder on the call of his friends...and return.
My rhymes and poetic attempts aren’t great, but the sentiment is sincere. ☺️

dmdavdmdav    Szerda, 12/05/2021 - 15:04

What makes you think that? I definitely like your version!
Maybe I misunderstood something... I'm relatively new to this site.
But your version is obviously rhyming. And since you have substituted some concepts from the original, I thought that it fits the LT-definition of "poetic". So, I just suggested that appropriate tags are used. That's all, no offence intended 😄

BlackSea4everBlackSea4ever    Szerda, 12/05/2021 - 16:22

Oh, I’m not offended! I just feel inadequate with the rhymes I make. Lol.
Thanks!

Green_SattvaGreen_Sattva    Szerda, 12/05/2021 - 18:40
BlackSea4ever schrieb:

I was hoping he will hear, read, ponder on the call of his friends...and return.

So do I. I miss him Sad smile

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