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Последний троллейбус (Posledniy trolleybus) (traduzione in Francese)

  • Artista: Bulat Okudzhava (ბულატ ოკუჯავა/Булат Окуджава)
  • Canzone: Последний троллейбус (Posledniy trolleybus) 8 traduzioni
  • Traduzioni: Francese, Inglese #1, #2, #3, #4, Spagnolo, Tedesco, Turco

Последний троллейбус

Когда мне невмочь пересилить беду,
Когда подступает отчаянье,
Я в синий троллейбус сажусь на ходу,
В последний, в случайный.
Я в синий троллейбус сажусь на ходу,
В последний, в случайный.
 
Последний троллейбус, по улицам мчи,
Верши по бульварам круженье,
Чтоб всех подобрать, потерпевших в ночи
Крушенье, крушенье.
Чтоб всех подобрать, потерпевших в ночи
Крушенье, крушенье.
 
Последний троллейбус, мне дверь отвори!
Я знаю, как в зябкую полночь
Твои пассажиры, матросы твои
Приходят на помощь.
Твои пассажиры, матросы твои
Приходят на помощь.
 
Я с ними не раз уходил из беды,
Я к ним прикасался плечами...
Как много, представьте себе, доброты
В молчанье, молчанье.
Как много, представьте себе, доброты
В молчанье, молчанье.
 
Последний троллейбус плывет по Москве,
Москва, как река, затухает,
И боль, что скворчонком стучала в виске,
Стихает, стихает.
И боль, что скворчонком стучала в виске,
Стихает, стихает.
 
Postato da boraarasboraaras Ven, 10/01/2014 - 22:45
Ultima modifica ltlt Gio, 21/05/2020 - 11:33
traduzione in FranceseFrancese (singable)
Allinea i paragrafi

Le dernier trolley

Quand je suis impuissant à vaincre le malheur,
Quand le désespoir me guette,
Je prends à la course un trolley bleu
Le dernier, n'importe lequel.
Je prends à la course un trolley bleu
Le dernier, n'importe lequel.
 
Trolley de minuit, file par les rues,
fais ta ronde sur les boulevards
Pour ramasser tous ceux qui ont fait dans la nuit
Naufrage, naufrage.
Pour ramasser tous ceux qui ont fait dans la nuit
Naufrage, naufrage.
 
Trolley de minuit, ouvre-moi ta porte !
Je sais que dans le froid poignant de la nuit
Tes passagers, tes matelots
Nous prêtent main forte.
Tes passagers, tes matelots
Nous prêtent main forte.
 
Avec eux, plus d'une fois, j'ai fui le malheur,
J'ai senti leurs épaules contre mes épaules...
Ah ! combien il y a de bonté,
Dans leur silence, leur silence.
Ah ! combien il y a de bonté,
Dans leur silence, leur silence.
 
Le dernier trolley navigue dans Moscou,
Moscou, comme la rivière, s'éteint,
Et la douleur qui frappait mes tempes comme un étourneau,
S'adoucit, s'adoucit
Et la douleur qui frappait mes tempes comme un étourneau,
S'adoucit, s'adoucit
 
Grazie!
thanked 12 times
Postato da sandringsandring Lun, 12/02/2018 - 09:19
Ultima modifica sandringsandring Ven, 06/09/2019 - 05:55
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I was submitting the video to this wonderful song when I noticed this enchanting translation in the comments area. Just couldn't help sharing it.

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BratBrat    Lun, 12/02/2018 - 09:55
petit élève написал(а):

comme la rivière -> It's not about any specific river, just a metaphor, right? If so, an indefinite article sounds more appropriate to me.

The translator might have taken into account that Moscow stands on the eponymous river...

BratBrat    Lun, 12/02/2018 - 10:21
petit élève написал(а):

"la rivière" sounds either like some river we're supposed to know about even though it was never mentioned before, or "the concept of river", as if rivers going dark was a well-known phenomenon Regular smile

Since the latter makes not very much sense we'll have to guess about the former... The fact that the river is called "la Moskova" in French couldn't cancel the possibility of that being implied.

BratBrat    Lun, 12/02/2018 - 10:13
petit élève wrote:

Nous prêtent main forte

A bit odd... Because at least 'à nous' could come out of the original...

BratBrat    Lun, 12/02/2018 - 10:24

Yes, it's just that way. It may mean, though, that the passengers are eager to help, that they always help, that they will surely help you (us, him, her, or anybody else).

sandringsandring    Lun, 12/02/2018 - 09:45

Pierre, dear, it's not my translation but I love it. Unfortunately, I can't correct it, I'm sorry. I promise I'll translate something for you but later. Now I must into German. Regular smile

sandringsandring    Lun, 12/02/2018 - 09:57

I don't think it was translated by a native and yet it sounds very nice, nearly a singable. Before I translate anything I'll read French poetry, I haven't done it for quite a time. Just to get the right feel.

BratBrat    Lun, 12/02/2018 - 16:25

Well, let's harvest the fruits. First of all, the translator is presumably a non-native French speaker. He or she used 'prendre à la course' to describe the process of chasing the blue trolley-bus and finally getting into it. A rather swift guy, indeed Regular smile Then comes this 'Nous prêtent main forte'. As I understand, something is probably odd there, because the main problem is not in the tense used, nor in the object, because it could be a metonymy when he speaks of "us" imaging himself being a part of those who are wrecked. It may be a kind of language subtlety not easily understandable by foreigners. And, slurring over the bird that could be even a woodpecker with the same effect, we end up with the city and the river. Here the problem lies in the following. In Russian 'троллейбус плывет по Москве' could be understood as if the trolley-bus was passing either along the city (number one association) or along the eponymous river (the second allusion) that could darken as well as the city when the night comes, and they can even do this simultaneously (Москва, как река, затухает). That trick couldn't be played in French, though the translator tried to cope with that using this counterintuitive 'la rivière'.
Something like that, if I'm not mistaken...

sandringsandring    Lun, 12/02/2018 - 19:14

bateau-mouches=речные трамвайчики for pleasure boats might have caused the allusion to the river. The English translation is a disaster Cry smile

sandringsandring    Lun, 12/02/2018 - 20:03

The English translation is the author's sick fantasies a la Okudzhava. I hate this kind of translations. Full of the translator's self-indulging ego. I've also thought of making it into a singable. Lots of questions to answer. "Беда" - misfortune???? No way. What's случайный троллейбус? Lots of questions to answer in Russian. We all know this song and feel it subconsciously but how to make others feel it if they don't read Dostoyevsky for breakfast? That is the question.

St. SolSt. Sol    Lun, 12/02/2018 - 20:11

Calamity, distress, tribulation.

sandringsandring    Lun, 12/02/2018 - 20:20

When it's beyond me to get over ill luck
When I feel choked up with despair
I jump on a blue trolley-bus on the ride
The last one out there

Something like that

sandringsandring    Lun, 12/02/2018 - 20:23

It's a draft, dear, it was done in 5 minutes. "Подступает отчаяние" is based on the Russian idiom "подступать к горлу" when you can't breathe.

sandringsandring    Lun, 12/02/2018 - 20:29

Bad luck is shallow, but ill luck is just the right touch, I think. He doesn't mean Eternal Evil, he means a streak of accidents, problems that bring him down and he doesn't see an end to them. Sort of karma thing.

St. SolSt. Sol    Lun, 12/02/2018 - 20:35

When I can't get over calamity woes,
When bitter despair draws near,
I jump on a moving blue trolley on toes,
The last one, I fear.

sandringsandring    Lun, 12/02/2018 - 20:44

Ok, guys, each of us can translate this song. I think it deserves much more than one translation. Regular smile

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