Hope you don’t mind:
> I couldn't start a campfire in the night. — campfire is a wrong choice; I couldn’t start the fire in the night
> I will leave easy and cleanly And fade in the bright candle light. — Let it be that I can break off easily and cleanly and fade...
> When there are no tears and only gleaming eyes. — gleaming isn’t usually associated with tears; ... and only tears shimmer/glisten in the eyes
> Why is it my cross, tell me, Anna, then, — why is it my cross to bear...
To love the one, whom I'm forbidden to love? — take out the comma
Why do I have a chilled voice as ice, The one I sing and cry? — why am I given the chilling voice with which I sing and cry
> Only one soul similar with mine, strangely, — only one soul is strangely similar to mine
Anatoli Trojanowski