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Metodius 2021-08-09A Love Like Fire
| 1. | Ψυχεδέλεια (Psyhedeleia) |
| 2. | Ελένη (Eleni) |
| 3. | Το πολύ-πολύ (To polí-polí) |
Metodius
Lör, 01/04/2023 - 20:57
Gosh, that was quite an onslaught, LOL!
Thanks for the corrections. It's evident that I am not a native speaker and I've studied Greek for a very short time.
Anyway, I must admit that I am mystified by some of the lines. For example: σαν κλάμα παιδικό μοιάζει να ακούγεται... I would have translated this as 'appears to sound like a child's cry'. The use of the verb μοιάζω has me baffled!
Also, Θέλω πάλι να βρεθώ - if it referred to Mala herself, wouldn't you need a reflexive pronoun like εμένα in order for it to make sense? Otherwise, it wounds like she wants to find Charles' embrace, or Charles himself (then again, wouldn't this need another pronoun to indicate the Direct Object's substitution?). I'm truly confused, now.
Well, I've already made all the changes you've suggested.
Have a lovely weekend. 
Schlimazl
Sön, 02/04/2023 - 08:35
The translation is fine, you got the meaning. You may do the changes only if you want to stay as close as possible to the text. Who is Mala, who is Charles? Hehe
Θέλω να βρεθώ στην αγκαλιά του> Ι want to be ( actually να βρεθώ here means to move into his arms, to stop being here and go there, encontrarme ( not ser, neither estar), something like that. Appear unexpectedly. ( We describe dreams using βρέθηκα. " Και ξαφνικά, βρέθηκα σε ένα δάσος": in our dreams we just find ourselves somewhere, just like that, in media res, without knowing how did we get there). This is why I said "to find my self" to make you understand the meaning in a way you would understand....the english verb "to be" it's a rather static one, if you ask me)
May I also add that the wrong place of the exclamation mark in the greek lyrics, creates an extra problem ( I am happy you got it right in the translation, though)
"Πέτα
στην αγκαλιά του μέσα!
Θέλω πάλι να βρεθώ·">
Πέτα!
Στην αγκαλιά του μέσα
θέλω πάλι να βρεθώ."
Schlimazl
Sön, 02/04/2023 - 08:51
ohh "I find myself" illiterate once again. I didn't know about " Mάλα-η μουσική του ανέμου". I had no idea. Sorry. I just needed to hear Vissi last night for some reason and .."βρέθηκα να ακούω" αυτό το τραγούδι
So, it was a theatrical musical play where Vissi had the leading role. Καρβέλας, of course, wrote the music.
Like a crying child, seems to make itself heard> It sounds like the cry of a child
tremble>leap ( it's about a sudden movement, a sudden, unexpected beat)
A fire of love> A love like fire ( lit. "a fire love")
Burns secretly in me> It's burning me secretly
In this macabre place> In a macabre place
Flows out from my eyes> runs down my eyes
Right into his embrace!
I want us to meet again:> I want to be/ to find my self
right into his embrace/arms