Hahah I guess I WAS called out.
I'm familiar with the author of that article. They've contacted me about some of my translations before, and I know they have a different translating style than I do. I suppose I do wish they'd contacted me about this line rather than calling it out but it's obvious they take song translation more seriously than I do and I commend them for standing up for what they believe.
And I mean, this translation of mine WAS pretty awkward in a number of ways. So I just took a few minutes and went back and rewrote it significantly. Took out the shakespeare line too. I remember when I wrote it I thought it was clever but yeah it doesn't match the tone very well. Hopefully the whole thing's a bit smoother now.

I'm glad you asked about my ethos... Ultimately, for me, song translation started as a hobby and a way for me to keep studying Japanese. I didn't put the STYLE into it that the author of the article cares for so much. I went with a stark, true-to-the-japanese approach because the Japanese grammar is what I was focused on while I was learning, but which lead to some awkward English. It's not that that was my ETHOS per se, but it's just about all I could manage at the time, or all the effort I wanted to put into a hobby.
But going back and reading some of my past translations now is ROUGH. Mis-translated words and mis-read meanings galore, and some very awkward lines, so I do understand when people have qualms. Current ethos? I do care now more about smoothness of reading and understanding in English even if it means a looser translation. I want people to be able to read along to my lyrics as they listen to the song and understand the meaning clearly. (For example: I personally definitely don't write my lyrics so that someone could hypothetically sing them to music to make an "english version" of the song. So I still don't share the "rhythm preservation" focus that the author of the article has, but that's how personal translating preference goes I guess, and I think it's cool that it's their focus and goal when translating.)

The problem is that I don't have the time or the energy to go back through all my old translations and make sure they'd fit my current standards/Japanese level. So instead, if anyone has a problem or suggestion with one of my translations, all I can hope is that they'll comment nicely and inform me to bring it and the song to my attention, and then I can fix it and while I'm there I can look over the whole song and re-write it if necessary.
So thank you for commenting nicely. :) (And I'm genuinely sorry for the long, ranty answer haha)