Very beautiful!
In the 5th stanza, I might say, "I'd sooner die in the tower."
1. | Medieval songs - History |
2. | Songs about kings, queens Pt. 2 |
3. | Songs of Legends, tale |
1. | La blanche biche |
2. | Acceso mio Core |
3. | Les tendres souhaits |
1. | Dead and buried |
Very beautiful!
In the 5th stanza, I might say, "I'd sooner die in the tower."
Hahaha. Okay:
In the first stanza, I'd capitalize "king" to "King Louis."
Second stanza: "she would like so keenly *to* be wed"
Stanza 10: "please let me cast a glance upon her"
Good luck! I'm not very good at writing poetry.
Sir Walter Scott isn't my favourite, but I do quite like him as well.
And yes, it's a lot of fun to emulate different styles. Especially the older ways of saying things. I feel that language was so much more vibrant and colourful in times past.
Writing this fake old English was a lot of fun, but the result is very likely to be a terrible mess.
Natives are welcome to show me the errors of my ways :)