Sahar90 on 2019-04-23
Moshe Kaye on 2022-01-05| 1. | Songs with Many Featured Singers |
| 1. | ממעמקים (Mi'ma'amakim) |
| 2. | שבט אחים ואחיות (Shevet Achim Va'Achayot) |
| 3. | אהבה כזו (Ahava Kazo) |
OgingerO
Fri, 26/04/2019 - 07:39
You did imho a great job, I like your translation better than israellycool's (although it's still good, I think yours flows better): https://www.israellycool.com/2019/04/21/watch-a-tribe-of-brothers-and-si...
(I've read it was made for Yom Ha'atzmuat. Proceeds from song sales go to the JNF).
Aliza Ben-Tal
Fri, 26/04/2019 - 09:35
Sahar90, there were initially a lot of inaccuracies in your original (very good) translation, so I posted a different version. I see that a lot has been adjusted, so I’m removing my separate corrections. For example, “A tribe of brothers and sisters”, mistakes שבת (sitting) for שבט (tribe)... it’s “Sitting as brothers and sisters”, not “tribe”. We still have a few differences, but your translation is altogether very good.
Shevet Achim V'Achiyot / Sitting as Brothers and Sisters
70 years in the car, I’m traveling and looking
At what was and what will be
And how my soul still yearns
From the Massada of sunrises
From Jerusalem of the [Slichot Kippur] prayers
From the Kinneret and Achziv beaches
From the parties of Tel Aviv
My father dreamed and prayed
To live in the Land of Israel
Today my child asks me
What is the story of Israel?
Home is here, as is the heart
And from you, I’ll not depart
Our forefathers, our roots
We are the flowers, the tunes
Sitting as brothers and sisters
The same neighborhood, the same street
Thirteen children of Jacob
Collecting together their wanderings
In their knapsack of longing
A man is the imprint of his native land
Engraving lines in the palm of his hand
Between the prayers and the vows
The fragrance of the citrus groves
And in my mother’s eyes
I’ll always find my place
An ancient tune which shows the way
Is playing on the guitar.
Home is here, as is the heart
And from you, I’ll not depart
Our forefathers, our roots
We are the flowers, the tunes
Sitting as brothers and sisters
Since Genesis, its all been sown together
Patches, patches of the story
Like two words – they connect
In the poet’s golden needle
I am from here, I belong
And every friend is like a brother
You are the one beating in my heart
I am east and west
Home is here, as is the heart
And from you, I’ll not depart
Our forefathers, our roots
We are the flowers, the tunes
Sitting as brothers and sisters
Home is here, as is the heart
And from you, I’ll not depart
Our forefathers, our roots
We are the flowers, the tunes
Sitting as brothers and sisters
Sahar90
Fri, 26/04/2019 - 17:53
Hi Aliza, I appreciate your comment and thank you for the kind words. I went over the translation again and picked up on one error (the 12 sons of Jacob), but other than that I couldn't find anything that wasn't a deliberate translation decision in the interests of ensuring the translation scanned like the original, and where possible also maintained the rhyming structure. As I wrote in my bio, my goal is always to maintain the sense and 'feel' of the original, rather than simply a word-for-word translation.
Regarding the title, in Galgalatz, YouTube and Spotify, the song title appears as "שבט" - tribe, and so that is how I approached it.
Moshe Kaye
Wed, 05/01/2022 - 00:31
על מה היה ומה נִהְיָה -- not נִהְיֶה unless avraham tal is singing it wrong which isn't likely.. so sahara has this line correct IMO.
Moshe Kaye
Wed, 05/01/2022 - 00:33
The source lyrics have been updated. Please review your translation.
Slight change to add Nikud to נִהְיָהthe verb to make the meaning 100% clear --> he / it became
I was looking for references as to whether there was a specific purpose behind it (e.g. Yom Hatzmaut, as it's so close to it), but couldn't find anything definitive.
This song, written by Idan Raichel and Doron Medalie (the songwriter behind Eurovision winner "Toy" among many others), brings together 35 of Israel's best-known and loved artists spanning different decades and genres.